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Unscripted;
Isn't that the way life should be?
A freedom to make one's own decisions
Without the guidance of destiny?

But on these nights,
When everything comes spinning back, I see,
That just as I write these words,
Some one else picks up a pen for me.
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XxBlindxBeautyxX Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I almost didn't notice the rhyme, which I like because, I usually avoid rhyme myself, thinking it cheapens a poem. But the rhyme here only serves to bring emphasis. Good job.
-Tay
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EMort Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
Thankyou! I don't tend to do it often, unless it happens naturally :3 My lecturers spend a great deal of time hammering it in, NO RHYME, NO RHYME, but they never notice when I slip it in XD
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Elegant, thought-provoking, meaningful. It's brilliant!
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EMort Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2011
Thankyou! :bow:
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Kira73 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This piece has been featured here --> [link]

:heart: KM
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EMort Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2010
Wow ^^ Thankyou!!!
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jimfleming Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2010
Don't be too hard on yourself....No one lives in a vacuum... We all feel the influence of others pushing and pulling at us...Just go surfing :)
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TheOtherSarshi Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
The proofreader in me screams: "ones is supposed to be one's!" So I wrote that first :)

I like it. The idea is neat - and true, isn't it? -, the title is nicely fitting. I also like the rhyming pattern. And I'm really happy that it works on both a physical and metaphorical level - most people seem to lose one for the sake of the other and it's quite annoying.

Anyway, fav. :D
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EMort Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
Changed ^^ I even wrote it the correct way in my notebook grrrr.....stoopid typos >_<

And thank you ^^ And yes I believe it's true; it's sought of my own version of faith that has developed over many many years :D The other night it just kind of hit me when I read someone else's poem with the exact ideas and then it was addressed to "Emma" (my name) It just felt like a reason to write this.

h_h thanks so much for the fave !!!
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TheOtherSarshi Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2010
My pleasure :)

Kudos.
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